Final Project

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StoryBoard

Music: Fix You by Cold Play

Scene 1:

(Typing on a computer searching in google, camera focused on typing)

Computer: How many kids drop out of school each year? 

(Click first link)

Computer: Why do kids drop out of school?

(Click first link scroll down and highlight “a perception that school is boring,feeling unmotivated”)

Scene 2:

(Kid is at school bored and doing nothing when is supposed to be taking test)

(Teacher takes test and gives a disappointed look, student grabs back pack and leaves.)

(Gets home and everything is dull, takes out test that has written on it “This is not how you were told to do it”)

Scene 3:

 (Typing in word document)

Computer: We need a school that motivates children to be creative and seek understanding in a way they find it interesting and fun. 

A school were you can explore and discover, somewhere to be creative and be happy.

Video: Film becomes in color

Scene 4:

Kid comes out of class happy talking with friends

Scene 5:

Kid coming home from school to a room full of pictures and smiling.

Script

Script for video: film will be all in black and white 

Music: Fix You by Cold Play

Computer

(Typing on a computer searching in google, camera focused on typing)

Computer: How many kids drop out of school each year? 

(Click first link)

Computer: Why do kids drop out of school?

(Click first link scroll down and highlight “a perception that school is boring,feeling unmotivated”)

Show

(Kid is at school bored and doing nothing when is supposed to be taking test)

(Teacher takes test and gives a disappointed look, student grabs back pack and leaves.)

(Gets home and everything is dull, takes out test that has written on it “This is not how you were told to do it”)

Computer

 (Typing in word document)

Computer: We need a school that motivates children to be creative and seek understanding in a way they find it interesting and fun. 

A school were you can explore and discover, somewhere to be creative and be happy.

Video: Film becomes in color

Show

Kid coming home from school to a room full of pictures and smiling 

Novel Project (All of the steps are on here.)

Word	Re-Written Sentence	Sentence & Page #	My Own Definition
Protruded	A rifle sticking out from the young man’s backpack.(Protruded)	A rifle Protruded from the young man’s backpack #3	Something that projects it self or sticks out.
Semiautomatic	With a Remmington self loading rifle isn’t the sort of thing that gives motorists pause in the forty-ninth state. (Semiautomatic)	With a Remmington semiautomatic isn’t the sort of thing that gives motorists pause in the forty-ninth state. #4	A rifle or firearm that reloads it self.
Wiry	Five feet seven or eight with a lean build.(Wiry)	Five feet seven or eight with a wiry build. #4	Some one or something that is lean and small. (Like a wire).
Improbably	A questionable light load for a stay of several months in the backpack country, especially so early in the spring.(Improbably)	An Improbably light load for a stay of several months in the backpack country, especially so early in the spring #4	Something that is unlikely to happen or be true, also something questionable or doubtful.
Congenial	He was pleasant and seemed well educated.(Congenial)	He was congenial and seemed well educated #5	Some one who is nice to be around and can adapt easily to new environments.
Meandered	The broken line wandered west from Parks Highway.(Meandered)	The broken line meandered west from Parks Highway 5	Something that wanders or twists without a direct path.
Reigned	A vast silence swept over the land.(Reigned)	A vast silence reigned over the land 6	Something that dominates or takes over.
Amalgam	Carpeted in boggy rare white mineral that is made of mercury and silver of muskeg.(Amalgam)	Carpeted in boggy amalgam of muskeg 10	A rare white mineral, which is a mixture of silver and mercury.
Estranged	If McCandles felt alienated from his parents and siblings, he found a surrogate family in Westerberg.(Estranged)	If McCandles felt estranged from his parents and siblings, he found a surrogate family in Westerberg.	A feeling of alienation, to keep a distance and turn away from affection.
Surrogate	If McCandles felt estranged from his parents and siblings, he found a family that took him in in Westerberg.(Surrogate)	If McCandles felt estranged from his parents and siblings, he found a surrogate family in Westerberg. 18	To act for another person or do a job for something or someone else
Copped	He confessed a plea to a single felony.(Copped)	He copped a plea to a single felony.19	To plead guilty or confess to a crime in order to receive a lighter sentence.
Altruistic	The latter is a reference to Tolstoy’s alter ego, unselfish, questing, illegitimately born.(Altruistic)	The latter is a reference to Tolstoy’s alter ego, Pierre Bezuhov altruistic, questing, illegitimately born.)19	Someone or something that is unselfish and concerned for others.
Illegitimately	The latter is a reference to Tolstoy’s alter ego, Pierre Bezuhov altruistic, questing, born out of wedlock.(Illegitimately)	The latter is a reference to Tolstoy’s alter ego, Pierre Bezuhov altruistic, questing, illegitimately born.)19	Someone who is born by parents who aren’t married to each other.
Odyssey	This trip was to be an adventure in the fullest sense of the word, and epic journey that would change everything.(Odyssey)	This trip was to be an odyssey in the fullest sense of the word, and epic journey that would change everything	The odyssey was one of the first myths or stories of our time it was an adventure.
Bore	The bore of brown water came (Bore)	The bore of brown water came 28	A hole made with an instrument.
Unheeded	He was ignorant, happy and near to the wild heart of life.(Unheeded)	He was unheeded, happy and near to the wild heart of life	Uncared for or ignored.
Recalcitrant	She’s right:In both photos Chris stares at the lens with the same pensive, UNWILLING squint.(Recalcitrant)	She’s right:In both photos Chris stares at the lens with the same pensive, recalcitrant squint.	A person with an attitude and who is uncooperative towards authority.
Pensive	She’s right:In both photos Chris stares at the lens with the same THOUGHTFUL,recalcitrant squint.(Pensive)	She’s right:In both photos Chris stares at the lens with the same pensive, recalcitrant squint.	Someone or something that analyzes and goes deep into thought about things
Bereavement	Such mourning and grief, witnessed at close range, makes even the most eloquent apologia for high-risk activities ring fatuous and hollow.(Bereavement)	Such bereavement, witnessed at close range, makes even the most eloquent apologia for high-risk activities ring fatuous and hollow.	A state in which you experience intense mourning and grief after a loss
Eloquent	Such bereavement, witnessed at close range, makes even the most expressive and forceful apologia for high-risk activities ring fatuous and hollow.(eloquent)	Such bereavement, witnessed at close range, makes even the most eloquent apologia for high-risk activities ring fatuous and hollow.	Something that is movingly expressive and very forceful.
Apologia	Such bereavement, witnessed at close range, makes even the most eloquent written apology for high-risk activities ring fatuous and hollow. (Apologia)	Such bereavement, witnessed at close range, makes even the most eloquent apologia for high-risk activities ring fatuous and hollow.	A written apology explaining or defending something.
Fatuous	Such bereavement, witnessed at close range, makes even the most eloquent apologia for high-risk activities ring insane and hollow.(Fatuous)	Such bereavement, witnessed at close range, makes even the most eloquent apologia for high-risk activities ring fatuous and hollow.	Being foolish or insane, not making sense in this case doing activities that are foolish or insane.

 REVIEW:

BOOK REVIEW ROUGH DRAFT.

Into the wild is one of the best books I have ever read. Honestly, I usually try to MEANDER away from nonfiction books but, I would really recommend this book to any and everyone from the ages 14 and up since the vocabulary can be difficult to understand. This book is like a breath of fresh air it really changed the way I look at things especially at society. The main character Chris McCandless is a very wealthy and CONGENIAL young man,he views things differently than everyone else. Chris doesn't understand society; why people judge, why they think the key to happiness is being succesful, and as I read this book I really understood and could relate to how Chris feels and why he felt that he couldn't take it anymore. Sometimes I feel ESTRANGED from society, like I don't really fit in or understand why people do things or why they care about things of the littleist importance. And I know that it is very IMPROBABLE that I would ever go out and live in the wild but, after reading this book I really understand Chris's motives to just be free and 

BOOK REVIEW FINAL DRAFT:

Into the wild is one of the best books I have ever read. Honestly, I usually try to MEANDER away from non-fiction books but, I would really recommend this book to any and everyone from the ages 14 and up since the vocabulary can be difficult to understand. This book is like a breath of fresh air it really changed the way I look at things especially at society. The main character Chris McCandless is a very wealthy, ALTRUISTIC and CONGENIAL young man.When Chris takes a trip where he discovers that he was ILLEGITiMENTLY born, he views things differently than everyone else doesn't understand society; why people judge, why they think the key to happiness is being successful, and as I read this book I really understood and could relate to how Chris feels and why he felt that he couldn't take it anymore. Sometimes I feel ESTRANGED from society too, like I don't really fit in or understand why people do things or why they care about things of the littlest importance. And I know that it is very IMPROBABLE that I would ever go out and live in the wild but, after reading this book I understand Chris's motives to just be free and away from everything. Throughout the book I also felt so sorry for his parents even though they were so FATUOUS and superficial, they still cared about Chris and there was so much BEREAVEMENT, and suffering that they were slowly all falling apart. One of my favorite quotes or phrases in the whole book was “He was UNHEEDED, happy and near to the wild heart of life”.I think that this phrase really describes Chris because he was so blissful PENSIVE which made him ignorant to the ugliness that REIGNED over society. What I most admire about Chris is that he expressed his ideas and perspective so freely and ELOQUENTLY.  

Corrections: By Sophie Steckerl

1.0- check, all good
1.5- add more to your definitions. Don’t make them be just one word
2.0- fix punctuation, capitalization and spelling errors
2.5- perfect
3.0- try using transitional words to polish it up, I really liked your review you gave details but, you didn't give it away, also you had a really good use of the words and the paragraphs flowed nicely. You have some grammar mistakes but, over all your review is great.

DIAGRAM:

These words all give off a feeling of alienation from the rest of society, they connect in a strange way of being different.	These words all give off intense states of thinking or feelings, they are all emotions that affect you emotionally and mentally.	These words all have to do with the law, some are things that law enforcement uses, implies and requires.	These word all have to do with things you might find or discover on an adventure or while exploring.
Improbably	Pensive	Illegitimately	Odyssey
Meandered	Altruistic	Copped	Bore
Estranged	Bereavement	Semiautomatic	Wiry
Unheeded	Eloquent	Apologia	Amalgam
Recalcitrant	Congenial	Reigned
Fatuous		Protruded
Unheeded
Altruistic
Surrogate

 

Input from Adult and Peer

Peer:
 I think you add a little too much detail at the beginning,It gets sort of boring. Also try to make your sentences flow better I think you have a very creative story but you need to add some finishing touches. Also there are some spelling and grammar mistakes that you need to correct
Adult:
Juli,
Your myth is very good and it had a really good twist that I was not expecting, I think you need to work on using other words, or finding other words because you are over using some words. Also you should work on the introduction which is a little too detailed. Overall you have a good story. Xx Mom

Edited Myth: Rough and final

Myth Rough Draft

Indent Middle School. It is the time in life where you begin to form yourself. (Wether you want to be a musician, an accountant, or a writer.) (Its a time where you learn from your mistakes and keep making them. When anything and everything is possible and dreams are dreamt) too much. We have all had our mid-school crisis, and this is a story about a girl named Brooke, dealing with her very own middle school problems.( mid-school crisis) . 

 The goddess of truth, Alethia looked down from the heavens to Deerpath, jr. high; seeing all the students and teachers. A beautiful blonde, green eyed girl caught her eye. It was Brooke, her olive skin glowed in the sunlight and her smile could give even the toughest guys butterflies. Brooke was one of the most popular girls in the seventh grade. Alethia spotted another girl with her, she had an enchanting gaze as though she were taken out of a fairy tale. Jackie who could get away with not brushing her dark brown hair or washing her porcelain colored face. Was Brooke’s best friend. Both of them had been best friends since Little Scouts Daycare.  

 Later that night after Brooke had come home from school, she did the only thing she did at night; think about Jackie’s boyfriend Zack. Both, Jackie and Brooke had crushes on him when they were younger. Brooke had backed off years ago. Since Jackie and Zack began dating Brooke had felt a lingering spark when she was with him. 

        Alethia looked down from the heavens ashamed. She felt that Brooke should be honest with Jackie and tell her how she feels. So that night, Alethia told the messenger of the gods Heremes, to send a bouquet of roses to Brooke’s home. Brooke came home late that day, after loosing her diary which contained her darkest secret.(That she was secretly in love with her best friend’s boy). As she went to the kitchen for a snack something caught her eye. Roses, each of which had bloomed to perfection. As she was admiring them, she felt a piercing pain her finger. A small drop of blood ran down her hand and fell on the floor. Brooke put her finger to her mouth, then something strange happened.

 Her finger began changing from red to blue to purple to green!  Alethia cackled with delight, seeing Brooke’s face stricken with fright. Brooke scrambled to the sink to wash her finger, but nothing seemed to change. By now it had become a rainbow of glowing colors. She began to rub her eyes until her eyelashes began to fall out. Seeing if maybe she was imagining it all. Brooke ran towards her mom’s room but, she was no where to be found. 

 With nothing left to do Brooke wandered into her room. She was about to lie on her bed when she saw a small piece of paper folded on her night stand. Curious to know what it was she quickly grabbed it and written on it in gold letters was; Truth fears no questions. At the Bottom the goddess had signed A.

 That night Brooke lay wide awake bewildered by the message on the paper, she kept looking at it to see if an explanation would come to her. All the lingering questions kept her awake. She finally decided to call Jackie. Knowing that Jackie went to sleep after Gossip Girl which was at 12 a.m. she answered her phone. Brooke began to tell her everything, Jackie hadn’t gotten angry and had confessed to having suspicions. They both decided that neither of them was going to date Zack. They realized that their friendship and being honest with each other was much more important. 

 Eventually she fell into a deep sleep. Brooke was suddenly awoken by a bright light. When she opened her eyes the goddess of truth Alethia was before her. Frightened, Brooke let out a scream but, no sound came out. Alethia began to tell her how proud she was of her for being honest with herself and with others. At that moment Brooke understood the message on paper. That when she tells and confronts the truth, she will not be afraid of anything or anyone. When Brooke looked down at her hand her finger was back to normal. Alethia had disappeared but her words of wisdom remained forever in Brooke’s mind.

Myth Final Draft

Middle School. It is the time in life where you begin to form yourself. We have all had our mid-school crisis, and this is a story about a girl named Brooke, dealing with her very own middle school problems.( mid-school crisis) . 

The goddess of truth, Alethia looked down from the heavens to Deerpath, jr. high; seeing all the students and teachers. A beautiful blonde, green eyed girl caught her eye. It was Brooke, her olive skin glowed in the sunlight and her smile could give even the toughest guys butterflies. Brooke was one of the most popular girls in the seventh grade. Alethia spotted another girl with her, she had an enchanting gaze as though she were taken out of a fairy tale. Jackie who could get away with not brushing her dark brown hair or washing her porcelain colored face. Was Brooke’s best friend. Both of them had been best friends since Little Scouts Daycare.  

  Later that night after Brooke had come home from school, she did the only thing she did at night; think about Jackie’s boyfriend Zack. Both, Jackie and Brooke had crushes on him when they were younger. Brooke had backed off years ago. Since Jackie and Zack began dating Brooke had felt a lingering spark when she was with him. 

        Alethia looked down from the heavens ashamed. She felt that Brooke should be honest with Jackie and tell her how she feels. So that night, Alethia told the messenger of the gods Heremes, to send a bouquet of roses to Brooke’s home. Brooke came home late that day, after loosing her diary which contained her darkest secret.(That she was secretly in love with her best friend’s boy). As she went to the kitchen for a snack something caught her eye. Roses, each of which had bloomed to perfection. As she was admiring them, she felt a piercing pain her finger. A small drop of blood ran down her hand and fell on the floor. Brooke put her finger to her mouth, then something strange happened.

 Suddenly her finger began changing from red to blue to purple to green!  Alethia cackled with delight, seeing Brooke’s face stricken with fright. Brooke scrambled to the sink to wash her finger but, nothing seemed to change. By now it had become a rainbow of glowing colors. 

Checking to see if maybe she was imagining it all. Brooke ran towards her mom’s room but, she was no where to be found. 

With nothing left to do Brooke wandered into her room. She was about to lie on her bed when she saw a small piece of paper folded on her night stand. Curious to know what it was she quickly grabbed it and written on it in gold letters was; Truth fears no questions. At the Bottom the goddess had signed A.

 That night Brooke lay wide awake bewildered by the message on the paper, she kept looking at it to see if an explanation would come to her. All the lingering questions kept her awake. She finally decided to call Jackie. Knowing that Jackie went to sleep after Gossip Girl which was at 12 a.m. she answered her phone. Brooke began to tell her everything, Jackie hadn’t gotten angry and had confessed to having suspicions. They both decided that neither of them was going to date Zack. They realized that their friendship and being honest with each other was much more important. 

  Eventually she fell into a deep sleep. Brooke was suddenly awoken by a bright light. When she opened her eyes the goddess of truth Alethia was before her. Frightened, Brooke let out a scream but, no sound came out. Alethia began to tell her how proud she was of her for being honest with herself and with others. At that moment Brooke understood the message on paper. That when she tells and confronts the truth, she will not be afraid of anything or anyone. When Brooke looked down at her hand her finger was back to normal. Alethia had disappeared but her words of wisdom remained forever in Brooke’s mind.

Peers comments on my portfolio

Juliana, I really like your portfolio. You can add more pictures to make it more personal and finish all the paragraphs you don't have. Adding some more information on what the assignment guidelines were will give the reader more information about it. Don't forget to add the journals you are missing. Overall you are on the right track.

Maria Pombo